Dead Roses, My Fanfic for "It's A Wonderful Life", love story...;) |
Dead Roses, My Fanfic for "It's A Wonderful Life", love story...;) |
Mar 23 2009, 09:28 PM
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[[.scg.]] Group: Veterans Joined: 23-March 09 |
Dead Roses
Please read and review this for me. If you see something is wrong with it, tell me! I want to know what you think as long as no flames or cussing is involved! (IMG:style_emoticons/default/jack_wink.gif) ---Another thing is the simple fact I do not own any of these characters, places, or anything concerning Harvest Moon. That would be Natsume!:) Chapter One: Loving is Letting Go, Sometimes... [/indent]Staring out to the fields of flowers, I sat on the edge of the fence. Usually they didn't plant flowers. But this was for a special reason, more so a sad one. He had died. And he was her brother. And the other one's boyfriend. He had died of pneumonia. We were best friends, and he never told me what was really wrong with him. He didn't only have pneumonia, he had an immune system disease. That was what killed him. And nobody even knew, except her.She looked hesitantly at the envelope. I had no idea why she wouldn't pick it up immediately. But she didn't. I guess maybe it was because she didn't want to have to remember being in love with him. |
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Mar 26 2009, 11:29 PM
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Member Group: Members Joined: 20-July 08 |
more more more more awesome u should have him get together with muffy then celia starts to get jealous
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Mar 27 2009, 03:27 PM
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[[.scg.]] Group: Veterans Joined: 23-March 09 |
Chapter Two: Leading On...
---Thanks to hmbabe for helping me come up with an idea for this chapter. It didn't turn out like I thought it would, but I think it turned out okay. Tell me what you think. So that night after the Harvest Festival, I walked Celia home. She still hadn't read the letter, and I didn't even know if she would. Maybe giving her that letter had been a mistake in itself. Gosh, I was worried about her. Celia just wasn't the type of person to act like this... With being a farmer, I couldn't very well dwell on Celia too much. After all, I had crops to harvest and fodder to get before the beginning of winter, right? No matter was right, I had to. And working made forgetting Marlin's death a bit easier. It wasn't that I wasn't over Marlin's being gone, it was the simple fact I was a bit worried. Marlin was about my age, just about two years older, and you just... I never expected Marlin to die. The same as I thought I would live to be at least ninety. His death gave me the awful reality check I could be done in at any time. Along with the worry of death, I was still surrounded by farm work that had to be done, and quick before the end of fall. I had so much to do and little time to do it, and with my procrastination, that wasn't good. So, on the tenth day of fall, I got Hugh to help me out a little for about three dollars. And of course, I spent a bunch of time explaining the what-nots of farming. But he was a dedicated and good worker once he knew what to do. He helped me get done in three hours what would've taken me two days, which was more time than I had. So, after our bright and early start at six, and finishing around nine, I had a bunch of time to kill. I started to go visit Vesta and see if I could badger any info on how Celia was doing, because Celia would lie and say she was perfect. But I stopped myself, Vesta was going through a lot, too, and I had no business putting my nose where it didn't belong. And, if I kept hanging around Celia, Vesta would try to rope me into marrying Celia. It would be like marrying my sister if I married her. Still thinking of what to do with the time, after I paid Hugh for his hours, I walked down the hill that led to my farm. I took my habitual look around the Valley, and I saw a rare sight. The blonde-headed bar maid was at the bridge. She rarely got out, and seeing as how I didn't pay visits to the Bar, I'd never seen her before. I edged closer to see what she was doing. There was a tall, dark headed man beside her. They appeared to be arguing. So I just went over casually to the river to fish. They were having quite a heated battle. I didn't pay attention to every word, but it concerned me. "You said you loved me! How could you?! You're no different than all the other men!" the blonde yelled. "Love is fleeting!" the man added. She slapped him in the face, "I don't need to waste my time with scum like you! It's over! Don't ever call me or anything! If you do, I'll get a restraining order!" The man started walking away yelling, "I tried to apologize, Muffy! You'll be sorry once I'm gone!" So her name was Muffy. I looked at the poor girl's face, and she looked back at me. Surprisingly, she came to where I was standing. "I guess you got a show today... I'm sorry if we scared all the fish away..." the girl glanced at my face and then her focus was again directed at the water. "Ah, it's okay. I know it's none of my business, but that guy was a real jerk! But just so you know, we're not all like that... I'm Tony," I flashed a smile. "Oh... You heard that? I'm sorry, but the heat of the moment... you say some things you really might regret sooner or later... and I'm Muffy," she laughed nervously as we shook hands. "Nice to meet you...Well, it was nice talking to you, but I've got to go get some lunch... Would you like to go with me?" I asked her. She blushed a bit before answering, "Sure... It's my day off anyways..." So I gathered up my fishing tackle and we headed toward the Inner Inn for lunch. Once inside, We went to sit down at a table in the kitchen. Ruby Minh was the only person I'd ever known that would put her restaurant's dining tables in the kitchen. Pulling out the chair for Muffy, I was reminded of Celia. I felt almost like I had betrayed her. I regretted making her believe I liked her like a girlfriend. Ruby saw us and handed us two menus. I couldn't believe she bothered giving me one, but she quickly caught herself and nodded as she took up my menu. Muffy looked puzzled, not hearing me order. Ruby declared as she looked for the ingredients to my usual dish, "Of course. Pork chop with extra spice and creamed potatoes... How could I forget?" Muffy looked through the menu carefully as I struck up a conversation with Ruby, "So Ms. Ruby, how's Rock these days?" She laughed, "As girl crazy as ever! He's already going with a girl from Mineral Town," she frowned a bit, "I don't like her... but don't tell him that." Ah yes, Rock's many exploits trying to find 'Ms. Right'. Lumina was the one he had dreamed of dating, but she was underage at sixteen. And her uncle, who had taken over after her grandmother decided she was too ill to look after her 'little girl', told Rock he'd have a pound of lead in his behind if he got anywhere near Lumina. Especially since he tried to kiss Lumina. Thinking of the many girls Rock had dated reminded me of Celia, again. It wasn't going to be easy to have a pleasant conversation with her popping in my head every five minutes. Just as Muffy was about to order, Ruby exclaimed with her focus to the door, "Oh, Celia! It's so nice to see you!" My thoughts registered what had just spewed out of Ruby's mouth. Celia was here. And she would see me with Muffy, and worse than that was that she would see me with Muffy before I got to explain that I made a mistake in leading her on... And she spoke, "Oh... Tony? Are you here with her?" I looked back toward her and saw the same disappointed face I expected to see and regretfully said, "Yes..." Celia's face turned red, "I'm sorry, I forgot something Vesta asked me to bring!" She dropped the basket of vegetables that were for Ruby. I apologized to Muffy and leaped over the spilled vegetables to retrieve Celia and explain. Muffy was right about me. I could be a real idiot sometimes. Maybe all men were destined to be jerks all their lives. It looked pretty promising that I would be, no matter how much of God's help I had... I ran out the door and called to Celia, "Celia! Please, let me explain!" She tripped and fell just before she reached the bridge and I double-timed to make it to help her up. If I didn't straighten things out now, they never would be straightened out. So I picked her up and helped her to the bench that existed lazily by the edge of the river. "What's there to explain? It's not like you professed your love to me..." she whimpered, lifting her dress to inspect her ankle. "I owe you an apology... I shouldn't have led you on like I did. I'm sorry, Celia. And you have the complete right to never want to speak to me again... but I really wish you'd forgive me so we could have a really nice friendship... Please?" I pleaded with her face-to-face. "That's all we ever were... I forgive you... It wouldn't be very Christian to hold a grudge... But I really have to get going, Tony... I really did forget some things that Vesta wanted me to bring to Ruby... I'll see you around," she sullenly spouted. "Bye, Celia..." was all I could say. I watched Celia that day almost like I was watching her walk out of my life. I regretted the feelings I felt for Celia that possibly still existed. I regretted just letting Celia walk off like that. I was attracted to Muffy, she was pretty and nice... But so was Celia... And then, I remembered Muffy was still waiting at the Inn. |
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Mar 27 2009, 10:05 PM
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Member Group: Members Joined: 20-July 08 |
(IMG:style_emoticons/default/emot-iia.png) wow wanna start a fanfic forum together ur bestie hmbabe
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Apr 4 2009, 04:04 PM
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[[.scg.]] Group: Veterans Joined: 23-March 09 |
Please, will anyone review this story? I need plently of feedback on it. Anything would be greatly appreciated. Especially an idea of what you'd like to see. I've only had one reviewer, but I need more. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/jack_wink.gif) Please?
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Apr 4 2009, 11:11 PM
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Member Group: Members Joined: 20-July 08 |
cmon ppl praise her I got an idea but it involves something kinda weird muffy is in a really short nightgown at tonys house and her and tony are making out and celia walks in to give him a sorry bear but she sees and she runs out but the mad scientist kidnapps her you do the rest
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Apr 7 2009, 10:46 PM
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whatever Group: Veterans Joined: 19-December 08 |
Okay I will review it. I like it,Its nicely written and easy to follow. It has all the properties of a well written story. You should continue,your very good at it.
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Apr 9 2009, 02:08 AM
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[[.scg.]] Group: Veterans Joined: 23-March 09 |
Thanks. I'm going to try to write Chapter 3 on Saturday and it should be up by evening. I have a research paper due and a choir concert on Friday night.
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Apr 13 2009, 12:45 AM
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[[.scg.]] Group: Veterans Joined: 23-March 09 |
(I'm sorry for the double post, but I want people to know when I've updated without spamming up another topic to tell them. Please forgive meeeee! *recovers from overreacting by slapping self in face* Okay... I'm better now!)
I think this one was a bit rushed... "( Tell me if you think so. Chapter Three: A Visit... After apologizing to Muffy and paying for her dinner, I hurried back to my place. I ran the whole way there, and crashed on my bed when I reached the one-room cabin. It was unfair of me to lead two girls on like that. Maybe it had to do with filling the empty void I had from losing a best friend. No. It wasn't that... When I had arrived in Forget-Me-Not, about two years ago, Takakura had encouraged me to take a wife soon. I hadn't really dated here lately, as I never really had the time. The closest thing to a real date I'd had since I got here was the night Celia and I spent at the Harvest Festival. I hadn't really thought of dating. It just never crossed my mind that much. As I thought, a powerful knock at the door was heard. I jumped off the bed to open it. Ironically the face at the door was none other than Takakura. His face looked contemplative. He looked almost sorrowfully at my face. Or ashamed? "Tony, is it true you just left Muffy at the restaurant?" Takakura implied about my activities. "I payed for her dinner. I'm sorry, I didn't think..." I started as he interrupted me. "That's right. You didn't think. Tony, I told you two years ago you needed a wife! And now... Ah, this isn't good. I was afraid you'd be discontented with this place..." Takakura spouted angrilly. "Mr. Tak, I can assure you I'm not discontented," I said in my own defense. He grumbled and pulled up one of my dining chairs. He sat slowly and looked around at the bare walls. He then looked at the messy floor and then through the window at the plant remains that hadn't been chopped down. It definetely looked as though I was discontented. I was left, competely exposed to my father's best friend, who had desperately wanted me to bring the farm to the glory my father had always wanted it to be. It looked like I was utterly failing. "Son, you don't have to lie," he said at last. "Give me two months. Two months and I'll have a fiance! I promise," I begged. "You've had two years. What makes you think that you'll have a girl in two months?" he said, doubtfully. "Two months. What'll it hurt?" He sighed and rolled his dark eyes, "Two months, Tony Vernon. Two months, and then I'm finding buyers for the farm. You may be your father's son, but I won't let this farm go to waste." He left solemnly as my heart thumped. I loved this place too much to give up now. Finding a girlfriend was number one on my list. That was all he cared about. I'd have to farm in the meantime, but that would be less complicated. This farm would not slip out of my hands. It just couldn't. I glanced at the clock as I worried about the next eight weeks. Seven-thirty. Bed time for a farmer who got up early to shower and feed the animals. I undressed and put on pajamas and collapsed in the bed. Thoughts clouded my exhausted mind. Before I could guess what I was dreaming about, my alarm clock was ringing away. The shrill bell stinging my ears. My head felt like a rock as I got up. Almost like I had a hangover or something. I looked at the calendar and realized it was Sunday. Church today. I would see Celia. My heart thumped as I ran to the barn to feed the animals and back to the house to shower. I got dressed in my Sunday best. I walked down the road to head to Mineral Town. I met a familiar face on the way. "Oh my gosh! Tony!" a young blonde called from behind me. Claire. No other blonde had a higher pitched voice. I had known her well because she used to come by Takakura's house about a year ago to learn about chickens with Popuri. I hadn't seen her since. I thought she'd ran off and married some blacksmith, but since her ring finger was free, I thought wrong. "Claire! How have you been, darling?" I said as she hugged me. "Not so great... I came back to rent a room at the Inn... I lost the ranch," she unsuccessfully tried to hide the hurt behind her eyes. "That's awful... I could talk to Ruby to see if I could get you a discount," I sympathized. She sighed, "Always the helpful one..." She headed toward the Inn, but I grabbed her arm, "You're going to church with me, little lady!" "And always the fatherly one..." she sighed again. I let go of my firm grip of her arm as she silently agreed to go with me. Claire meant a lot to me. She listened to me and understood me. That's what I loved about her. |
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Apr 13 2009, 03:06 AM
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I don't remember selling my soul to you. Group: Veterans Joined: 13-March 09 |
You shouldnt feel discouraged if there arent many reviewers.
I like it alot. Tony be a playah. Celia was always my favorite (Besides Lumina but I dont have SE) Keep it up! |
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Apr 13 2009, 05:21 AM
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Member Group: Members Joined: 9-April 09 |
One flaw... Marlin is Celia's uncle (if I remember right but I know they are related) so its not the best match up to me...
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Apr 13 2009, 03:08 PM
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[[.scg.]] Group: Veterans Joined: 23-March 09 |
Vesta and Marlin are related as siblings. In DS and AWL, Marlin and Celia are matched as a couple. Celia has no relation at all to Marlin or Vesta. Vesta is just a maternal person who took Celia under her wing when Celia had no place to go.
Thanks for reviewing it. And Tony is a playa. Don't worry, he'll get payed back for hurting the girls! ;) |
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Apr 13 2009, 07:37 PM
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I don't remember selling my soul to you. Group: Veterans Joined: 13-March 09 |
Just make sure he gets his Celia in the end please...
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Apr 13 2009, 07:39 PM
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[[.scg.]] Group: Veterans Joined: 23-March 09 |
Sure thing. I think I've got it all planned out about how it'll end... (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalasmile.gif)
Chapter Four: Convicted... Claire and I walked to the church, talking all the way. The whole time, Muffy and Celia and how I had mistreated them were in the back of my mind. It was killing me, the guilt. Every five seconds, I had Takakura in my conscious scolding me for toying with these girls. "Tony, you've gotten quiet. Is something the matter?" Claire begged of me as we neared the church. "There is... Claire, I'm sorry, but I've got to run ahead and apologize to someone..." I took off for the church, leaving Claire far behind. When I reached the doors, I could see the back of Celia's head, already sitting in a pew. I ran to the seat she had taken and begged her forgiveness. "Celia, I need to talk to you outside," she looked at me like I was possessed, but still followed my lead to the graveyard beside the church. "Tony, what is it? I don't want to be late..." she explained like she didn't even want to see me, which was understandable. "I just want to apologize to you for all I've done... I've made a mess, and I'm trying to fix it. Please, forgive me?" I groveled. She frowned a bit, "You know you already apologized. You owe me nothing. Now if you'll excuse me..." I stopped her, "No. You deserve more than just an apology. Celia, if you ever need me, just ask. I'll do anything for you from now on. Don't be afraid to ask, either..." A young man walked up beside Celia as I begged her forgiveness. She glanced at him and back at me. He gently grabbed her hand and interlaced their fingers. In my foolishness, I had ignored the man she was sitting by. She announced the news I already knew, "Tony, this is my boyfriend, Jack. Jack, this is a good friend of mine, Tony..." Jack reached out to shake my hand, and I received it. I faked a smile. Celia had a boyfriend, she wouldn't need me anymore. If I confronted her about it, I'd sound like a little kid. I had no business hanging out around Celia anymore. The Harvest Festival and all the tender moments we'd shared before that meant nothing now. We would never actually be friends again. She would marry him and forget about me. "Well, Tony, it was nice meeting you. Celia, we need to get back to our seats. The service is about to start..." he smiled. I stood there, shell-shocked. My stillness was interrupted by a gentle tap on my shoulder and the screech of Claire's high voice. I felt like crying. "What's wrong?" she asked. "Nothing..." I said as she headed into the church without me, "I just lost one of the best friends I ever had..." I sat down beside Claire in the church and waited for Carter to start the service. I looked at the crosses and candelabras throughout the church. Finally the service began with piano music by the quite librarian. The song, "Surely the Prescence of the Lord is in this Place" reminded me of the time I went to a revival about three years back. It also spoke to me. I had been backsliding. As I sat there, I did something I rarely ever did. Cry. The hot tears rain down my face and landed on the pages of the hymnal that was before me. Claire looked mysteriously at me. Celia looked back from her pew and saw my face. From what I could observe, she was crying, too. I knew why for her. Marlin always went around humming this tune. It was almost like God was trying to remind us of why we were friends to begin with. Like he was scolding us for almost giving up one of his greatest gifts. Friendship. I dried my eyes, hoping Celia would look back again. She did. But this time, she was smiling at me. I gave her my crooked smile and she almost laughed out loud during the sermon, but she was able to contain herself, and so was I. Carter finished his sermon about thirty-minutes later. We were free to talk. I ran over to Celia when Jack finally departed from her side. She smiled at me as she had done during the service. "Tony, I'm so sorry-- I..." I interrupted her in mid-sentence. "No, it was my fault... I shouldn't have done that to you!" I cried, halfway. Her eyes grew shimmery with tears, "Oh, Tony... I was childish. But it would be foolish to give up this great friendship God has given us!" I laughed, "Yeah, we were almost too blind to see that!" I hugged her, but immediately let go when Jack approached. His face showed mixed emotions. One of those emotions was anger. "Celia, we've got to get going," he said coldly. "Bye, Tony," she was still smiling. I didn't exactly know what it was that triggered the feelings I had in the church, but they felt reassuring. First, I had been convicted for acting like a fool around Muffy and Celia. I had apologized to Celia, but I still owed Muffy one. But then some sort of hope came over me. Something telling me that everything was going to turn out okay, despite the mess I had made of things. I hoped so. I didn't want to leave Forget-Me-Not for good... This post has been edited by showchoirgirl: Apr 14 2009, 08:39 PM |
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Apr 18 2009, 03:48 PM
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I don't remember selling my soul to you. Group: Veterans Joined: 13-March 09 |
Woops, sorry I didnt see the edit sooner. Good job!
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May 8 2009, 08:47 AM
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Goodnight Group: Ranch Hand Joined: 27-March 08 |
Cute, this is nice reading. Keep going, I'd be interested in reading more.
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May 10 2009, 10:36 PM
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[[.scg.]] Group: Veterans Joined: 23-March 09 |
Just so everyone knows... I haven't discontinued the story. I know it's been a while, but I'm being loaded down with homework, what with finals and all... so give me until May 23 (the day after the day after the end of the school year... lol). I should have Chapter 5 (finally) up. Thanks to all my readers and reviewers. :)
**The revised version is on fanfiction.net... I don't like how this one is turning out. I wanted to keep Tony more innocent. It's just me. But the newer version will be more in depth and will just have a better storyline overall. The revised version on ff.net will have more content, however the first chapter is identical to this one. :) Here's the address -- That's Just Life for You. (I changed the name) I'm sorry if it upsets you that the original story is discontinued, but the story in general will be finished. Again, I wish to thank the people that read and reviewed it. This post has been edited by showchoirgirl: May 16 2009, 09:55 PM |
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