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[hmbabe]

Tragedy hm tot lovestory by hmbabe

Felicia:"My name is Felicia"

Luke:"Hi im Luke"

Felicia:"Cool hair" I said to him blushing,

Luke:"oh thanks I guess see ya I have to go on a date with Kathy"

Why are men are just so subtle and I thought he likked me wow I felt dumb so we said our good byes and left, Kathy shes not to bright I thought well then again nither was luke I guess I should be happy for him besides if hes happy im happy oh what am I kidding im in love so I went home and changed into my maids gown that was totally hawt I was going to the bar not for the drinking but for the boys duh I couldnt wait maybe that was where luke was having the date sure enough luke was there but apparently kathy was mad at luke for playing the video games she was steaming red she was so mad she went up to owen and made out with him luke watched the whole thing he looked dizzy but when he saw me he fainted I ran over to him but this dancer girl ran up to him and gave him cpr before I could reach him I was so mad I stomped up to her and demanded an explanation instead she just woke up luke and tounged him

that was ch 1 hope u like post ur fanfics here too

I looked so hurt duke could tell and he cant notice anything so he came over and tried to set me up with toby ughhh then owen ughhh then calvin ughh then gill no way then julious yes finally duke has some taste julious looked at me with his cold eyes I looked away when I looked back he was gone wow that was fast so I went into the woods to look for him

Felicia:"julious where are you"

all of the sudden pack of wild dogs ran up to me snarling so I screamed naturally in a blink of an eye juli Thats my nickname I gave him was ther

Juli:"what are u doing here" he screamed into my ear

Felicia:"I I I uh was just llooking fofor yoou" I stammered barely getting it out , then again he gave me the cold stare that made me want to jump off a cliff one of the wilddogs lunged at me and everything went black the next morning I woke up I was in the hospital

Felicia:"whwhat happened" I felt really dizzy and there was something that stung on my head I looked into the mirror and saw stitches

Felicia:"great" I said sarcastically the in a split second I saw juli

Felicia:"how do u do that" I asked

Juli:"do what" he said confused

Felicia:"u know where your not in here but then when I blink my eyes your back"

Juli:"we will never speak of this again" he growled at me.

Felicia:"ookay" I said suspiciously.

Juli:"I brought you flowers" he choked out.

Felicia:"thanks" I said blushing.

Juli:"um bye"

Felicia:"do you have to go" of course he was already gone

that was ch 2 please comment or post ur fanfics here

Felicia: I sat in the hospital bed reading farming weekly "wow I didnt know you can grow turnips in ponds"

Juli:what was that

Felicia:how long have you been here

Juli:just two hours but ive only been in here two minutes

Felicia:what do u need

Juli:excuse me

Felicia:I mean what do u want from me

Juli: I cant just stop by to say hi

Felicia:really Juli

Juli:okay I wanted to apologize

Felicia:for what

Juli:fighting zombies what do u think

Felicia:really I dont know

Juli:so u were unconscious oh its nothing

Felicia:please tell me

Juli:fine I blah balh

Felicia:what

Juli:I dropped you on your head on the way over here

Felicia:you did so ur not strong

Juli:no I am I just did it purposely

Felicia:what am I going to do with you

Juli:throw me in a toxic waste dump

That was ch3 hoped you liked it

[hmbabe]

aNY one please im begging please please please please please please ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh please

[Gabstah]

Maybe you should try formatting it correctly? It would make it much easier to read.

[Twilight Wandere...]

Frail Love~ (Note, all you are about to see I just made up. No joke.)
The sun rose high above the trees as my nurse woke me up. "Melodi, Melodi, it's time to wake up." I clutched the bed sheets as I rose from my bed, turning around and making it as I did so. "Good Morning Fressia. Did you have a good night?" She nodded in that brisk manner of hers and said "Oh yes ma'am. Did you?" I smiled sweetly-just as I did every morning-and flat out lied. "I had the most amazing dream. I shall tell you about it later. What are we going to do tod-" She briskly cut me off. "I must go to the market today ma'am, you must amuse yourself. But be careful not to venture into the forest, it's dangerous in there." With that she grabbed her shopping basket and was off. Now you must understand, normally I was a good girl, but the way she had put that made me want to travel into the forest. I laced my sundress up and placed my hat on my head and walked out. The outside was way more beautiful than it had ever looked from my window seat, but since I had an illness, I was never able to travel outside. I daintily climbed over the loose branches laying on the ground when I heard something crack from behind me. I turned around, and standing there was a beautiful woman with long purple hair. I turned around and starting to run, tripping over a stick and twisting my ankle.

Would anyone like me to continue?

[showchoirgirl]

Nice. I'd like to see an addition, please Twilight Wanderer?:)
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hmbabe: The second was better than the first, but might I suggest using play formatting if you aren't going to start new paragraphs with dialogue? Please don't take this to heart, because I see so much potential:)! Try this:

Luke: Hi, I'm Luke.
Felicia: Cool Hair.

What I must say for you is that you have a great idea. I think the romance between Julius and Felicia makes for an interesting fanfic. Please write more, I want to see what happens! But please make it clearer with formatting :)?

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I need some feedback (thanks hmbabe!) from some people for my fanfic Dead Roses (it's in Any Colour You Like in its own thread) please read.
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Christmas Wish

Chapter One

The feeling of nostalgia and anxiousness clouded my mind as I walked through the inch-high snow with the masculine figure before me. My husband, Marlin. We were going to cut a Christmas tree for our home, just a week before Christmas. It would be our first Christmas tree together, if that makes sense. The way we were going out to the forest to cut down a tree almost made me wonder if my father and mother ever did that.

My name is Jill Tailor. To explain... Where to begin? The answers are endless. I could start with my birth and head forward or possibly even start at my adolescence. But to prevent digressing further, I believe I'll start with where I live at and why.

Well, I live in Forget-Me-Not Valley. It's a long name, right? But it's named that because of Tony Vallier, the man who founded the village, was amazed by the number of Forget-Me-Not flowers that grew. He thought the place had to be named for those flowers. So anyways, he and his family settled on a small hill. That hill is filled with beautiful flowers every spring, it's a wonderful sight that many people from other towns come to see.

I live, with Marlin, on a small farm in Forget-Me-Not Valley. It was given to me by my mother and father when they passed on. That was when I was only four. But my grandparents in Flowerbud took care of me, so I never really remembered my life in Forget-Me-Not Valley. When I turned eighteen, they told me about the farm. I decided to go. And so, I've been here the past year. In that year, I became Jill Tailor.

I must say, though, I do love my husband unconditionally, despite our seven year age difference. I know it's weird that I'm nineteen and he's twenty-six, but it's not like he's old enough to be my father or anything. Marlin was gruff, and fatherly like. I guess I just loved that about him.

Anyways, back to the story. We were walking along through the forest looking for the perfect tree through the drifts of snow. But I suddenly felt sick. My knees gave way and I knelt painfully in the snow. Marlin whisked around to see what was the matter, his stony blue eyes met my pain-endowed brown eyes.

"What's wrong, Honey?" he asked, leaning over grasping my arm gently.

"I-I... I don't know... I feel like I'm going to..." I managed before my breakfast regurgitated through my esophogus.

His caring face turned into a bit of a disgusted, but understanding one. He held my shoulders so I wouldn't fall into my half-way digested food. Thank goodness he did, because I would've fallen into it if he hadn't held me when he did.

I finished retching and he picked me up like I was a little girl. I thought he would be carrying me home, but he kept going straight when we crossed the entrance of our farm. By then, his destination was clear to me. He was going to Doctor Hardy. Great, an examination.

When he opened the door, Doctor Hardy was standing at the table, mixing medicines. Marlin spoke words I didn't bother to listen to and laid me on the hospital bed. I was almost mad at him for taking me here. Doctor Hardy edged closer and pulled the curtains together. He pulled out his stethoscope and put it on my left side. The procedure went as normal from there. He asked a few personal questions I didn't think necessary, but one. After my answer, he nodded and gave a contented sigh.

"Jill, will you step over here with me?" he motioned for me.

And yet another test was done. I didn't know what it was for, because I had never had it done before. But soon, he was done and I went back to sit on the cot for a moment while he decided on the results. I was a bit exhausted.

Ten minutes later, Dr. Hardy came to me with a smile on his face. He wouldn't tell me what I had or anything at all, but he simply pulled back the curtains. Marlin looked nervous and upset, staring at the floor while sitting in a folding chair. When he heard us, his face darted upward with the eternal question, "What's wrong with her, Doc?"

"Nothing at all!" he smiled, sneakily.

Marlin looked upset, "Then why the heck did she throw up this mornin'?"

"That's typical for a woman that's with child..." his smile grew bigger.

My eyes flew to the Doctor, then to Marlin. Marlin's blue eyes grew bright and jumped to my face. We both screamed and ran into each other's arms. A baby. Wow. The whole doctor's office ordeal was worth it all. I would soon be a mother. Wow.

"Jill!" Marlin yelled happily.

"Oh, Marlin! Our first child!" I squealed.

Dr. Hardy chuckled at our childish attitudes, but they were well-deserven. We were going to have a baby. The product of our undying love for each other.

"I love you!" he said, enthusiastically.

"And I love you!" I answered back.

A baby would complete our home. A little one that would wander around the farm soon enough and possibly learn about farming. The unadulterated, pure thought of our child was absolutely the best Christmas gift either of us could ask for.

Marlin and I farewelled the good doctor and we headed home, but Marlin wouldn't let me walk. He just had to carry me, which I thought was extra sweet. Only about a month pregnant and he was already so careful and thoughtful. He would definetely be a good father.

So that night, Marlin was extra helpful. He cleaned up the house for me, he cooked dinner, washed the dishes, and even made me hot chocolate and cookies. I had no doubts whatsoever of our love or our competency to raise a child. All that was left to do was to get a bed, toys, diapers, clothes, and everything else... And learn the basics of childcare from Marlin's mother... The more I thought about it, the more I contradicted my feeling of readiness to raise a child. It was just the mood swings... right?

[Twilight Wandere...]

Mmm. Love your fanfic Showchoirgirl. You stopped off in a good place, which I think is always the hardest part. :)

(Nother note. Please, feel free to correct me. I promise I won't yell at you, since Twi's way of writing is literally coming up with it on the spot, as she's not the type to write something over a long period of time. >.>)

Chapter 2: Not a woman?!
The purple haired woman moved closer and knelt down next to me. "Oh my, you are hurt. What is your name~?" She asked, as she pulled a wrap bandage out of her bag. I took note of the few metals and stones she had in there as well when she closed it. "Now where does it hurt~?" I was too absorbed in this woman to really answer her question. "Ma'am, what is your name?" I asked her. I could see something snap in her face as she said cooly. "My name is Julius." I pointed to my ankle and he started to wrap it. "Ah. I'm so sorry sir. But now that you mention it...only a man would wear those boots, and not very many female clothing line's make coattails..." He had finished wrapping my ankle and started to stare at me, as if he was deciding what to do with me. As he did that I felt the bile rise in my throat like it had done so many times before. I got up and stumbled behind a tree. "Why did it have to be now?" I thought to myself, when the blood rose from my throat and landed all over the ground. Mr. Julius could hear me retching, and he probably wondered what I was doing. I felt a hand on my back moving up and down and he said "Oh, you poor thing. We should take you home." He picked me up bridal style and carried me home. Of course, right as soon as Fressia got back that is. She screamed out "Young Mistress! Julius, go ahead and place her on her feet." He did so and Fressia started to probe him, just like every other person I had dared to approach. "How did you know where she lived?" She asked him sternly. He started to stammer out "U-uh...I...u-uh...Hey, look at that, I gotta go. Seeya Melodi." With that he ran off. And it was when he did that I realized. I had not once told him my name.
(What you are about to see is Julius' perspective.)
I ran back to the Town Hall building and heaved all my weight against the door. Whom I was looking for wasn't there though. Mayor Hamilton pointed to the second floor, and I ran up the stairs to the library. Gill was watching from a window, and once I came in he pulled back into his seat. "Did you see that? She found out!" Gill rolled his eyes as me, just like he always did, saying that this situation could be fixed as easy as snapping your fingers. Heh, stupid rich boy. "You just need to progress on your stalking skills and exscuses. Remember, the stalker does not approach the stalkee unless she is unable to fend off fanboys." He flipped a page in his book and spoke the last part. "Remember, if it doesn't work out, you are free to rent my basement from me."

(Comment if you like. That last part was cuz I saw the chance and I always thought Gill was a stalker. :P)

[Horcrux]

[Okay I'll do one about witchie]]
Chapter 1; Hair


The Witch Princess slept in her bed,the sun shown through the windows and reflected of a mirror into her face. She slowly woke from her slumber to this irritating thing. She sat up in her bed clutching the blankets close,for it was very chilly that morning. She squinted to the light. She got out of bed and but her fuzzy slippers on. She looked at her brew bubbling away. Oh,thats right my revenge on the ditz the Harvest Goddess. she sneered her name. Oh,well I'll finish that later along with everything else. She had something even more important then that today,for this day would change her life forever. She went to the bathroom and brushed her mangled hair. Urh this will take forever without magic.,she thought. So she went to her vast collection of books and found a recipe for perfect hair. She took out a smaller caldron and set it on the table. She came to the ingredients shelf and took out all the things she needed singing there name. Once she had all of them,piled high in her arms she spread them all on the table. She slapped down the huge book of recipes and got to the page she wanted. She carefully,but still clumsy,put all the things into the caldron. She muttered some words and it began to glow an orange glow. She stepped back a step.Is it supposed to do that?,she thought. Then it stopped, she cocked her head and slowly walk to the caldron. She peered inside then POOF! it shot up and hit her in her face and got into her hair. Ohhhhh NOOO!,she screamed to herself,now what did she look like? She went into the bathroom and looked into the mirror, her hair was perfect,but her ears were not huge and pointed. Oh no I must find a potion for this.She scurried back to her book and looked for a recipe to fix the hideous ears.


[Lol,I just made that up,there will be 3 chapters. Can anyone guess what the 'big day' is? ]

[hmbabe]

[Okay I'll do one about witchie]]
Chapter 1; Hair


The Witch Princess slept in her bed,the sun shown through the windows and reflected of a mirror into her face. She slowly woke from her slumber to this irritating thing. She sat up in her bed clutching the blankets close,for it was very chilly that morning. She squinted to the light. She got out of bed and but her fuzzy slippers on. She looked at her brew bubbling away. Oh,thats right my revenge on the ditz the Harvest Goddess. she sneered her name. Oh,well I'll finish that later along with everything else. She had something even more important then that today,for this day would change her life forever. She went to the bathroom and brushed her mangled hair. Urh this will take forever without magic.,she thought. So she went to her vast collection of books and found a recipe for perfect hair. She took out a smaller caldron and set it on the table. She came to the ingredients shelf and took out all the things she needed singing there name. Once she had all of them,piled high in her arms she spread them all on the table. She slapped down the huge book of recipes and got to the page she wanted. She carefully,but still clumsy,put all the things into the caldron. She muttered some words and it began to glow an orange glow. She stepped back a step.Is it supposed to do that?,she thought. Then it stopped, she cocked her head and slowly walk to the caldron. She peered inside then POOF! it shot up and hit her in her face and got into her hair. Ohhhhh NOOO!,she screamed to herself,now what did she look like? She went into the bathroom and looked into the mirror, her hair was perfect,but her ears were not huge and pointed. Oh no I must find a potion for this.She scurried back to her book and looked for a recipe to fix the hideous ears.


[Lol,I just made that up,there will be 3 chapters. Can anyone guess what the 'big day' is? ]

Let me guess her big day is her wedding yay I caught the flower s ps love the avvie where didja get it

[Twilight Wandere...]

Chapter 3: Glittering Flowers in the Sky
It had been a week since I had met Julius in the forest. Right after Julius had run off Fressia had started to chastise me, telling me that going in the forest was a bad idea and now that I had disobeyed her I had met a creep who stalked me. Finally, she had finished up by calling my parents. They had agreed with her and told her to pass on to me that I was coming back home with her in two weeks since I could not behave. I believed myself to be indifferent to this, but a sliver of myself was unhappy with this. I disregarded it and went on with my life. Today, Friday-as I have said, a week later-is the fireworks festival. Just like every year I had planned to watch them from my window seat. That is, until I heard a small tap at my window. I looked down, and sitting there was Julius. He softly opened the window and pulled me out. "Would you like to go see the fireworks?" I nodded my head, and he whisked me away to the beach. Once we arrived there he spread out a blanket and motioned for me to sit on it. I did so and he said "We still have time to spare. Do you remember me?" I shook my head, knowing that he was asking for before the previous week. "We were very good friends Melodi. But one day you fell down the stairs and hit your head so hard you forgot alot of things. I tried to rescue you, and it made me very sad when you woke up and asked me who I was, so I left for this town." The fireworks started and I watched them while thinking about what I had just been told. 'It explained why I could only remember up to a certain point, but when did I get my illne-' Speaking of the devil, I could feel the blood rise in my throat. I ran away from Julius and threw up.

[Horcrux]

[Yup! Thats what it'll be. And Sarah made it for me. I always make my own sets or request.

Chapter 2 coming soon,im tired.]

[showchoirgirl]

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