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Oscar
post Aug 7 2010, 06:09 AM
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Chapter 13- Doomsdayvice

The town hall at Nayome was buzzing with noise. Everyone in the entire town was gathered to hear Zen's speech.

"Welcome everyone! I'm glad you could all be here tonight." Zen stopped to take a quick sip of water as she prepared for a long speech.

"So, I have called this meeting today because we need to do something about Riesgo. Saffy is going to kill us all with this crazy machine." Zen pointed to the blueprint Mizuki had given her.

"This thing is supposed to fire some enormous laser that will kill all of us and eliminate the South Land civilization." Zen stopped to let everyone gasp.

"What?! This can't be!" Dani yelled.

"Oh my, won't someone think of the children?!" Cassie exclaimed.

"Yes, yes, it's a horrible thing! Now, there is a way to prevent this. Cocoa has told me that a big enough magnet can fry the power source, spherium, and completely shut down the machine. Sooo, we need to get to Riesgo and throw a magnet into the power source." Zen smiled at seeing everyone's relieved faces.

"That's great! There's a solution!" ZBoy yelled.

"Yeah, but we can't just stop there. We need to take out Saffy! It's the only way that the South Land will truly ever be safe. And this is where you all come in. I certainly can't do this on my own! I need help stopping Saffy and this horrible machine. It's gonna be a big battle. And that's why I want everyone that's willing to stop Saffy to stay here. If you do not want to, then leave right now." Zen stopped to let the ones that wanted to leave exit the town hall.

And many did leave. About 95% of Nayome quickly got up and left; none wanted another battle that they felt would end in tragedy.

"Nobody has hope...but thank you to all of you that stayed!" Zen wrote down the names of everybody in the town hall and gave it to EB, the mayor.

"These names are gonna be important; save them." Zen proudly handed the sheet to EB.

"Hmm, so there's you, Twi, Totoro, ZBoy, Dani, Oscar, Eliza, Cassie, Cocoa and that's it? Why there's only two boys in this group, too!" EB looked surprised.

"Actually, there's two more people that will be joining. Tyler and Crystal. So three boys! And hey, what's the matter with all the girls?" Zen yelled back.

"Uhh, nothing. Just odd, I guess. Wish I could go, but I've got to stay and be the mayor here. And Crystal is in jai-" EB was cut off by Zen.

"So?! I want her with me!" Zen screamed.

"Fine, fine. Follow me." EB got up out of his seat and left the town hall towards the prison.

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"Lenyo! It's about time you got here, geez," Chris smacked Lenyo in the back of his head.

"So-sorry...uhh, hello boss. I'm here to test your Doomsdayvice." Lenyo told Saffy, but refused to look at him in the eyes.

"About time! Gosh, you scientist are slow. Now hurry up! I want to fire this thing immediately, do you hear? Or are you deaf?" Saffy stared at Lenyo. He had been much more cruel lately to everyone after Katie's death.

Lenyo moved a knob on the odd honeycomb machine that held the spherium. The same machine that Zen had seen on her last day as Saffy's assistant. Suddenly, the ground began to shake and split in half, but it was not the ground that was splitting in half, it was two huge metal doors underground. A laser that looked like a giant telescope at an observatory, popped out. The honeycomb machine that was holding all the spherium was pulled by a conveyor belt beneath the ground towards the laser's interior. It was clear that that was the power source.

After the power source was locked behind a metal door within the laser, it skyrocketed into the clouds. About half a mile up in the sky, it stopped. Lenyo began to climb the ladder behind the laser to get to the computer.

Once there, he entered the password and aimed the laser to Nayome, but when he pushed the "Fire" button, nothing happened. Lenyo knew what the problem was and had to go back down to tell Saffy.

"Umm, boss, I'm afraid the laser is not ready yet. You see, Doomsdayvice is barely absorbing the power of the spherium; it's going to take at least 24 hours for it to be ready to be used." Lenyo said as he stared at the ground.

"You idiot!" Saffy slapped Lenyo in the face. "I have to wait a whole day until I can begin destroying those fools?!" Saffy's left eye began to twitch.

"Yes, sir...sorry..." Lenyo apologized and ran back to the lab.

"Whatever, boss. Tomorrow we start the process! Tomorrow we will finally rule the world!" Chris laughed.


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Yeah, I just realized there's mostly girls in the South Land side. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalaexdee.gif) I hope I didn't forget someone I mentioned in the past; let me know if I did, please! Though there's still other members to be introduced later on....

Leave me some comments!!
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Zen Clarke
post Aug 7 2010, 02:45 PM
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(IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalaexdee.gif) Saffy's eye twitching made me laugh. Geez, the people of Nayome aren't very brave, are they? I do an epic speech and they're still too scared to fight. Ah well. Still got ma buds with me...

P.S. Girls rule! 8D
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Oscar
post Aug 7 2010, 04:51 PM
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Yay! One comment. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalaexdee.gif) Though I've seen others read it.

Yeah, Nayome people are just scaredy cats...
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Christopher
post Aug 7 2010, 11:30 PM
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Why am I still on Saffy's side?
Your story is starting to make absolutely no sense now.
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Oscar
post Aug 8 2010, 03:32 AM
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-_- You're on Saffy's side cuz you never officially left, did you? You only agreed with HMR and helped him out.


Just stick with the story; you'll see.
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Zen Clarke
post Aug 8 2010, 03:39 AM
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So...liek...new chapter please? 8D
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Oscar
post Aug 8 2010, 05:57 AM
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Chapter 14- The N-Team

(This chapter's a bit longer, but it'll be fun to read! Though I had to shorten down the fighting scene. Might post it when I'm done with the story)

Before the team could leave to Riesgo to stop Saffy and his horrible machine, they needed to stop and get weapons first. So, they went to see Tyler, the provider of many kinds of weapons. Tyler had it all. From gasses to grenades.

"Hello Tyler! I missed ya at the meeting!" Zen told Tyler.

"Well, yeah, I gotta watch these things." Tyler, a large, beard-less man said pointing to the box of guns.

"Hmm, that's why we're here. We are gonna need weapons and we are gonna need them now! All of us here are going to stop Saffy and put an end to Riesgo!" Zen smiled proudly.

"Wow, that's a little unrealistic. Your team is so tiny." Tyler laughed.

"Yeah, well, are you going to come with us or just give us weapons?" Zen asked.

"Both. I wouldn't miss this action!" Tyler smiled and began grabbing guns from the boxes. He handed everyone small machine guns, two grenades and kept the flamethrower for himself.

"Look, I'm running low on supplies. I know I'm supposed to have everything, but I just haven't been able to get ahold of much more." Tyler told the group.

"It's okay, this will help us out a lot! Let's go! But, umm, we need a name. What should we be called?" ZBoy asked the group.

"It's obvious that we'll be the N-Team! "N" for Nayome." Crystal smiled.

"Sounds familiar, but sure, that works, Crystal..." Oscar said as the group left the shop and on their way to Riesgo's gate.


Once there, Cocoa brought out her laptop, plugged it in to the passcode lock and worked her magic. She hit the keys, stuck out her tongue and in no time hacked the code and opened the gate.

"Amazing! Great job, Cocoa! And I can tell that Saffy did change the passcode," Twi said as she glared at the computer screen that showed the code.

The N-Team ran into Riesgo, not knowing what to expect, but they were greeted by the psychic girl, Charmy.

"What?! You brought friends?" Charmy stared at Totoro and Twi. "Whatever. This will be easy."

And before anybody could point their guns at Charmy, she had waved her hand and had instantly collected all their weapons and thrown them behind her.

"Ha ha! Easy!" Charmy laughed, but like always, she stopped paying attention and Dani threw Orie at her face.

"Gaah!? What is this disgusting thing?!" Charmy tried to take it off, but Orie was holding on tightly to her hair.

Eliza sneaked up and punched Charmy in the face, knocking her back into the empty riverbed (Saffy had drained the water out after Zen, TBR and Crystal used it to escape and had blocked off the exit of the river).

Eliza ran to a grenade and threw it into the riverbed.

BANG!

"Why did you do that, Eliza?! Orie was still in there!" Dani's eyes began to water.

"We have no time to waste, besides, it was distracting her." Eliza guiltily said.

"We have to go now! I think I see the machine over there to the east!" Zen pointed.

The N-Team ran towards the machine, but a shadowy figure emerged from the darkness of the night. It was Saffy's latest recruit, Kozunai. He was a master of stealth. He took out a small radio.

"Boss, we have company." Kozunai whispered.


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Before the N-Team could reach the enormous laser. They were stopped by Kozunai and about 10 other Riesgo soldiers.

"Ahh, welcome to Riesgo, guys. Now the boss is a little sad that he didn't get to be here to welcome you guys, but I think we should be enough. Everyone, kill them!" Kozunai yelled to the soldiers and pointed towards the N-Team.

"I'm sure that thing has a computer at the top; let me go see what I can do!" Cocoa yelled back as she ran towards the laser.

"I'll cover you!" Oscar yelled, whipping out a machine gun and firing at a nearby soldier. Though the soldier was wearing protective gear.

Cocoa began to climb up the ladder and Oscar nervously covered her. When Cocoa reached the top, she broke out her laptop again and connected it to the main computer of the Doomsdayvice. She punched the keys, opened up some programs, unscrambled some numbers and immediately the entire system shut down in the Doomsdayvice.

"Yes! I did it, Oscar!" Cocoa yelled back.

"Good! Now come and help me!" Oscar yelled back as he shot a soldier in the forehead.

But at that moment, a shot was fired, a different sounding shot then the ones around the N-Team. Cocoa fell to the ground, dead. TBR and Saffy ran to the group.

"Nice shot, TBR." Saffy smiled. "Enough everyone! You've done good." Saffy looked around and noticed that two of the N-Team members were dead. While the others were protecting themselves behind some metal boxes. The two members that had been shot to death were Eliza and Cassie.

Crystal fired at Saffy, but the bullets were stopped by a forcefield around TBR and Saffy.

"Ha ha! Fools. Kozunai, will you please page Lindstrom?" Saffy said and began to laugh.

Kozunai whipped out a small remote, pushed a button and after a minute or two, a robotic figure flew down from the sky. It was Lindstrom.

"Ahh, this is my latest creation. He used to be a soldier, but he was horribly dismembered. So, the doctors here figured they'd save him by making him this robotic freak. Well, they saved him, alright. But is he happy? Who cares. At least he listens to me. Lindstrom! Capture these idiots over there!" Saffy pointed to the N-Team.

"Yes, boss," Lindstrom said in a robotic voice and his right hand turned into a net-launcher. From there he shot out multiple nets, capturing the N-Team. The nets were specially designed to instantly tighten when they captured something and that's exactly what they did. The nets were so tightly wrapped around the N-Team members, that they were unable to even keep ahold of their weapons, let alone fire them.

"Lindstrom, will you take these people to the prison? I'll think of something to do with them later." Saffy ordered Lindstrom and walked away with TBR.
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post Aug 8 2010, 06:03 AM
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Aww, I'm already dead. Ah well. D':
Why must you all try to shorten your chapters? Make them looooooong.
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Oscar
post Aug 8 2010, 06:04 AM
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(IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalaexdee.gif) I don't know. I figure people will stop reading and skim through the chapter if they're too long. But yeah, sorry, had to kill ya. :O Though the entire story is already about to end. I think there's like two or three chapters left!

I'll promise to at least make the final chapter long!
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post Aug 8 2010, 06:05 AM
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Personally, I think you should try to include as much as you think you should into a chapter. I like 'em long. Yay!
Will evil or good win? :O
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post Aug 8 2010, 06:07 AM
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Yeah, I hear what you're saying, but I still think people would get bored of it faster if it were too long. But I'm glad you'd read the long ones! :D Maybe I won't try so hard to stop myself from typing a lot in the next ones.

Ooo, who knows, who knows. Maybe it won't be the typical ending. Maybe evil will win this time. Or maybe not? Maybe Dani will just suck them all up like Kirby?
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post Aug 8 2010, 06:09 AM
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DDD: You killed my octopus. WHY, OSCAR, WHYYYY!?!!!@?!@:"!KR(OAUJODDDDD:


Still it was quite lovely. <3
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post Aug 8 2010, 07:30 AM
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Haha, yeah, poor Orie.:( But he will live on in our hearts!
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post Aug 9 2010, 12:43 AM
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Chapter 15- The Afternoon Before The End


"What do you mean it's not ready yet?!" Saffy yelled at Lenyo.

"Well, that girl, umm, she really messed with the system. I gotta fix it before we can actually use it." Lenyo nervously said.

"Fine! Fix it, but fix it fast!" Saffy glared at Lenyo and walked away.

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The sun shined through the small window above the prisoner's heads. The N-Team had been captured and taken there since the previous night and now it was noon.


"Oh God! I can't take this anymore! It's soooo boring!" Oscar yelled as he pulled his hair.

"We'll find a way out. Somehow..." Zen started to think.

"I wish I had my little purple laser, but sadly that's "evidence" for the murder that I supposedly committed." Crystal sighed.

"I don't think anybody here really thinks you killed Darth, Crystal. At least not after everyone found out TBR was working for Saffy." Oscar told Crystal.

It was then that HMR and Chris walked to the cell with a big grin on their faces and with keys.

"HMR and Chris? What do you guys want?" Zen asked.

"We're here to set you guys free." Chris smiled.

"What?! But why? Aren't you working for Saffy?" Zen said as she walked up to the cell bars.

"Well, HMR convinced me that there's no future here; that what we're doing is wrong and not gonna help us at all in the end. Saffy's the only one helping himself." Chris began to unlock the cell.

"And I'm supposed to be dead, so Saffy doesn't even know I'm here right now, ha ha!" HMR laughed.

Chris opened the cell and the N-Team ran out skipping and jumping with joy.

"Thank you, you two!!" everyone yelled.

"Okay, okay. We need a plan here." Zen tried to quiet everyone down. "I am gonna go and find Saffy and make him pay for everything he's done." Zen walked over to their weapons that had been confiscated and took out a gun. There were only two other weapons left and one grenade. The rest had been taken by the soldiers.

"We're also gonna need someone to guard the gate and make sure everything is all clear for when we try to escape." Zen looked at everyone to see who would volunteer.

"We'll do it!" Totoro yelled and lifted her hand and Twi's up in the air.

"Good, thanks. Now the rest can come with me and help me defeat Saffy!" Zen yelled.

Everyone nodded and followed Chris and HMR out of the prison and out to the lands of Riesgo. Totoro and Twi ran towards the gate, Totoro holding the second gun in her hands. Dani carried the grenade and HMR carried the third gun.

But Tyler had stayed behind to tie his shoe and ZBoy ran down to the prison to get him to move out.

"C'mon, Tyler! Everyone has left; we need to go, too!" ZBoy pulled Tyler up.

"I'm goin', I'm goin'." Tyler got up but froze as soon as he saw a robotic figure coming towards them.

"Saffy has strict orders that no prisoners are to escape. I am supposed to kill anyone who tries to escape." Lindstrom's left hand changed into a machine gun and he pointed the gun towards ZBoy. Tyler pushed ZBoy out of the way as Lindstrom fired.

ZBoy and Tyler ran up the stairs and out of the prison, but Lindstrom quickly followed. Once out there, Lindstrom fired a grenade that blew up right in front of their faces, barely missing them.

"I must kill you now." Lindstrom pointed the gun to Tyler and ZBoy, who were laying on the ground, scared.

Tyler then elbowed Lindstrom right on his leg, causing a dent in the leg. Sparks began to fly from the leg and Lindstrom was unable to stand up, so he fell to the ground.

"Man, he's made out of some cheap materials!" Tyler laughed.

"Let's go, ZBoy, while he's on the ground!" Tyler grabbed ZBoy and ran.

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"Guys, we're missing ZBoy and Tyler!" Crystal yelled to the group.

"Oh well. We can't go back for them, they're probably dead." Chris said as he approached the golden dome building where Saffy's throne was at.

"Alright, here's the key, Zen. This will open the elevator door to the throne room where Saffy should be. Me and HMR will guard the elevator once you guys go in. Good luck." Chris handed the key to Zen and everyone ran inside the building. They passed the enormous indoor waterfall and ran to the elevator. Everyone, except Chris and HMR, squished into the tiny space and Zen got ready for the confrontation she had been waiting for. The doors closed and up went the N-Team, minus two members.

The elevator door opened and Zen brought out her key, she opened the small gate that stood in the way and in ran the team together.

"What's this?! How did you fools escape?" Saffy frowned and called over Kozunai. "Kill them!"

Kozunai ran down to meet the group. Zen pointed the gun at Kozunai, she shot, but Kozunai was no longer standing there; he moved with ninja-like stealth.

Kozunai took out a revolver, similar to Saffy's and started to shoot at the group. Everyone scrambled. Kozunai would fire from behind the enormous pillars that decorated the room, but the N-Team would use them as shields from the incoming bullets.

"He's just one person. This should end him." Dani threw the grenade to the opposite side where Kozunai was at and...

BOOM!

The throne room had its western wall completely blown off and Kozunai had also been killed by the blast. The room was filled with dust, smoke and debris. Zen decided that it was the perfect moment to sneak up to Saffy. She ran towards the throne, but Saffy was gone. Behind the throne she noticed a small door on the floor that was opened and had stairs leading down. She figured Saffy must've gone down it to escape.

The stairs took Zen back outside. She could see that Saffy was now at the Doomsdayvice. She ran towards the laser, she knew she didn't have much time. She grabbed a horseshoe shaped magnet from her pocket.

Saffy reached Lenyo, who was still working on the computer.

"You're not done yet?!" Saffy exclaimed.

"No, boss." Lenyo glanced back at Saffy and then back to the computer screen.

"I want you to shoot at Nayome right now! I want to destroy the South Land now!" Saffy was now glaring at Lenyo.

"But boss, it's not ready yet!" Lenyo for the first time yelled at Saffy.

"I don't care! Just do it!" Saffy furiously yelled back.

Lenyo had no choice. He turned on the laser and began to set the coordinates of Nayome. But before the machine got ready to launch into the air, Zen opened the door that held the power source, threw the magnet in and jumped to the ground. The Doomsdayvice shot into the air and began to whirr and buzz, but the magnet was quickly causing the spherium to weaken.

"Oh no, there's something wrong with the power source!" Lenyo told Saffy. "And I can't stop the machine; I haven't put up the option to manually stop it yet!"

The Doomsdayvice immediately retracted back to the ground. The laser fell onto the ground, causing a massive hole and it shot an intense ray that left everyone near it blind for a couple of seconds. The laser shot its beam underground and immediately the ground all around Riesgo began to shake as if an earthquake was happening.

Zen regained her sight and she could see a helicopter approaching her. She recognized the pilot, it was HMR along with Chris and the N-Team members who had accompanied her to the throne room.
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post Aug 9 2010, 03:45 AM
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Magnifico!
Pure excitement.
I loved it.
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post Aug 9 2010, 03:46 AM
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Yay! I'm glad, Chris! But it's not over yet.

The next chapter SHOULD be the last one. I'll try and give all the remaining people who are alive a little scene of their own.
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post Aug 9 2010, 03:48 AM
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Maybe a scene where I find out I secretly had a family that Saffy kept away from me?
That would be BOSS.
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post Aug 9 2010, 03:54 AM
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Haha, that would be a good idea, Chris, but it just wouldn't work out for the last chapter. Something huge is gonna be happening during the whole chapter that'll distract everyone, sort of.

Kind of wish I hadn't killed so many of the bad people...I think I'm gonna bring back Charmy for a bit. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalaexdee.gif)
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post Aug 9 2010, 03:57 AM
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Maybe Saffy could secretly be my brother or father?
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post Aug 9 2010, 04:03 AM
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Hahaha! But then it wouldn't be a surprise cuz you already know. You'll get a scene, though. I'll go think about your scene now.
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