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Katie
post Jul 21 2010, 10:09 PM
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QUOTE (Oscar @ Jul 21 2010, 06:08 PM) *
I have something planned for you and Katie. Oh yes, it'll be fun to read. Or not.



This is either going to make me laugh or squeal giddily. x]
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Oscar
post Jul 21 2010, 10:14 PM
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Haha! Well, it's supposed to be a sad moment, actually. But I don't know if it'll really come out as "sad".
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Christopher
post Jul 21 2010, 10:59 PM
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QUOTE (Katie @ Jul 21 2010, 05:03 PM) *
Go go gadget Gopher!


Katie likes my extendo arms ;D
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Oscar
post Jul 22 2010, 05:02 AM
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Chapter 2- An Escape and A Girl

"I'm tired of being in this cell!" TBR stood up and ran towards the cell bars and smashed right into them with his bare hands.

"Aaaaugh!" TBR cried in pain as he fell to the ground.

"Oh gosh, that's not a very smart way to escape, TBR." Crystal said politely. "I didn't want to have to do this, but get ready."

Crystal walked towards the cell bars and pulled out a small laser, it looked almost exactly like a pen. She clicked a button on the pen-like laser and it shot out a purple beam that cut right through the bars in an instant.

"There! We're free to go!" Crystal smiled at Zen and TBR.

"What?! You could have done this the whole time we were here?!" TBR angrily yelled at Crystal, but Crystal smiled back and replied.

"Well, I was trying to think of what to do after we sliced the cell bars and now I know." Crystal walked outside and pointed towards a guard tower.

"Passed that tower is the gate and I remember that there was a small river flowing out of the walls that keep us in here."

Zen jumped outside of the cell and began to stretch. "Freedom! But now we need to pass that tower without being detected."

"I have a way," Crystal said as she pulled out a small grenade from a box in the corner.
"Here TBR, think you can blast that tower?"

TBR pulled off his eyepatch and took the small grenade from Crystal. A miniature cannon zoomed out, like a camera, from his empty eye socket and loaded it in through a small hatch in the bottom.

"This thing can do anything. Shoot missiles, bullets or bombs. As long as they fit, of course."

TBR stood back and fired the bomb toward the tower. The tower blew up into pieces and rubble flew everywhere.

"We don't have much time; the rest of Saffy's goons are gonna see the smoke and run over here! Let's go!” Zen yelled.

The door to the throne room swung open and in ran Chris yelling at Saffy. “Boss! Our prisoners: Zen, TBR and Crystal have escaped!” Saffy looked down at Chris from his throne. “Well, that's not good, now is it?! Let's go find them.”


Crystal pulled out her mini-laser and sliced through the bars that were letting the small river into the empire. “Let's go guys, we're free.” Crystal sighed in relief.

Saffy caught up to them just as Zen was about to ride the river to the other side.

“Stop! Where do you think you're going, squawk?” a parrot yelled.

Zen looked up and saw a bright red, blue-tailed parrot hovering in the air. “Jason, it's you. I'm glad to see Saffy is treating you well. Umm. sort of.”

Saffy came up to the side of the river. “Hey! Nobody leaves, unless I say so!” Saffy yelled, but it was too late, Zen was already swimming to the other side.

“Oh, Saffy, remember I was gonna tell you something? Well, I know where she is.” Zen yelled back to Saffy as loud as she could. She, Crystal and TBR floated down the river and into safety.

Saffy's eyes widened and he fell to the ground on his knees. “She knows where my Katie is...”

“Should we go after them, boss?” Chris asked Saffy.

“No, let them go. She will lead me to her.” Saffy said and smiled at the ground.

****

I've spaced out when people talk, as suggested by Crystal. Makes the chapter look longer, but it's really just as short as the first. Hope it's easier to read! And gimme feedback! I like feedback. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalasad.gif)
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Crystal Talian
post Jul 22 2010, 05:06 AM
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Much, much easier to read. =3

I have a laser pen! A purple laser pen! That is awesome.
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Oscar
post Jul 22 2010, 05:10 AM
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*fixes typos*

Yeah, I remembered you liked purple. :)

EDIT: I still had some "TBs" in there. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalaexdee.gif) It's TBR! Not TB.
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Saffy
post Jul 22 2010, 05:32 AM
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She knows where my Katie is? Why won't Zen be of help faster!?
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Oscar
post Jul 22 2010, 05:45 AM
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You'll follow her to Katie, no worries!

And TBR was reading but he said nothing. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalasad.gif) )
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Crystal Talian
post Jul 22 2010, 05:51 AM
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Maybe TBR didn't have time to type anything, Oscar. Trust me, it happens. -_-;
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Oscar
post Jul 22 2010, 05:53 AM
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TBR better type something! He gets to appear early in my story! (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalaexdee.gif)
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Zen Clarke
post Jul 22 2010, 03:21 PM
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Yay! And Jason's a parrot. That has made my day. >D
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Toaster Boy
post Jul 22 2010, 05:34 PM
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I was on my phone, managed to log in and typing was out of the question. In the end I checked a couple of topics and gave up.

Anyway, the story is great so far, and that I have an early role makes it way more fun. TBR though? I guess you wanted to incorporate my name but wanted me to be recongizable.
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Oscar
post Jul 22 2010, 09:21 PM
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Yeah, going to RS on the phone is tough. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalaexdee.gif) Well tough to type in. Plus, I think your signature doesn't show up when you post in your phone.

Good, I'm glad you like it! Yeah, I wanted it to stand for something other than "Toaster Boy" for this story.
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Oscar
post Jul 23 2010, 06:57 AM
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Chapter 3- The Location

Crystal and Zen came out from the dark, cave-like opening in the enormous wall separating the South Land from Riesgo. They looked around and were shocked to find out that TBR was not with them.

"Where did he go?!" Zen was beginning to panic.

"Hmm, this is odd. But it could be possible that one of Saffy's minions took him?" Crystal told Zen with a less than confident expression.

"I don't think so! It was dark in there, but we would have seen something, right?" Zen stared back at Crystal.

"I don't know, but we gotta keep moving forward, Zen. I'm sorry..." Crystal said, but couldn't look Zen in the face, so instead she looked up over the wall at the sunset hiding behind the buildings of Riesgo.

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Zen and Crystal knew they were getting close to the town of Nayome, because they could smell the sweet aroma of Dani's flower field. They climbed out of the river and onto the field. Staring back at them was a two acre blanket of roses, lilacs, tulips, cosmos and violets. Dani somehow was able to keep all these flowers alive throughout the entire year; it always felt like Spring in the area.

They went straight to Dani's house, they were thirsty and extremely hungry. They came up to her front door and before they could knock, the door opened.

"Hello, hello!" Dani said with a bright smile. She was wearing a yellow dress with a red ribbon tied around her waist and wore red flip flops on her feet.

"Come in, you two! I knew you were coming; Orie told me," Dani happily said and pointed towards her indoor aquarium where a small, red octopus swam.

Zen and Crystal had completely forgotten about Dani's magic octopus that could supposedly see into the future every full moon. They didn't believe it, but that octopus kept being right about everything.

"You know, Orie predicted the Great War, at least that's what my mom said." Dani said as she gestured Crystal and Zen to come in.

"Oh, the great war. I've heard so much of it! That's how Saffy took control of more than half of Earth!" Zen shrieked in disgust.

"And that's when robotics became so popular. Most people who participated in the Great War, whether it was us, the good guys or Saffy's army, it didn't matter; most got horribly injured. People's arms were blown off or part of their faces were cut off. Robotics saved these people; it gave them another chance at living a "normal" life. My dad got his stomach, liver and part of his lung shot off, but thanks to robotics, he's now still around to hug me...with his iron stomach and chest." Crystal began to whisper and her smile disappeared.

"Enough about the Great War! Saffy still hasn't gotten the South Land! We'll beat him; we'll make our own army. I know someone that can help us." Zen was now getting excited and began to walk around the foyer.

"Umm, who would that be, Zen?" Dani asked.

"Katie. I know where she is! She has been secretly working down at a bar in Pudge under the alias Patricia! One of the cooks told me; he was one of Katie's best friends." Zen said as she stopped pacing around the room to receive the cup of tea Dani had for her.

"Squawk! Saffy will be pleased!" Jason, the parrot, said as he flew away from near the opened door.

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"Good birdie! You found out where Katie is! You know, I might just give you that antidote one day, Jason. But not anytime soon. I've still got more work for you!" Saffy told the parrot with a grin.

"Squawk! Yes, of course...boss." Jason squawked as he flew to his cage.

Chris came rushing in to the throne room and looked up at Saffy."Boss! Hasfusel said he's done with cooking for you and is leaving Riesgo!"

"You know what to do; persuade him to stay, Chris. I don't have to explain this to you. Oh and maybe invite your friend HMR with you."

"Nah, I've got this. Sorry for disturbing you boss," Chris said while pulling up his sleeves.

Chris ran to the kitchen just as Hasfusel was leaving. Chris grabbed the back of Hasfusel's shirt and brought him up off his feet, then lunged him across the hallway. Hasfusel landed right on his face, horribly injuring his nose; blood began to ran immediately from his nose, cheek and lips. Chris came up behind Hasfusel and picked him up again with his cold, metal hands, brought him towards his face and smiled.

"You're not going anywhere. You are staying here and cooking for the boss, got it, Hassy?"

"You fool! I will no longer work for that misre-" Hasfusel was unable to finish because Chris had sent his fist right into his face, causing him to lose consciousness. Hasfusel was then dragged to a cell, his face was covered in blood.

"You're lucky I didn't go full force on you, Hassy. Goodnight!" Chris closed the cell door and waved to Hasfusel.
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Daniella
post Jul 23 2010, 07:10 AM
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Since when do I wear dresses? D: Still, though, it was coolies :3

I do believe Saffy is indeed the villain.
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Christopher
post Jul 23 2010, 07:16 AM
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Dude, I literally just OWNED Hassy (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalaexdee.gif)
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Oscar
post Jul 23 2010, 07:23 AM
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Dani: I see you as a person that might wear dresses. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalaexdee.gif) I just figured it would fit with the flowery theme. But you got your Orie.

Chris: Haha, yes, you did. Doubt Hasfusel will ever even read that. But that's what you do; you "persuade" people.


I wish more people would post! I know others have read it...I guess they're waiting for their names to show up only. :/
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Daniella
post Jul 23 2010, 07:27 AM
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Eh.

Am I going to appear again or am I just in that chapter?
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Oscar
post Jul 23 2010, 07:29 AM
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Lolz, you're gonna be in part of the next one and others, so yes, you'll reappear. Mostly everyone will appear over and over. Unless they die...
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Daniella
post Jul 23 2010, 07:33 AM
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Yays. <3 When I show up later, I'd like to have Orie on my head, yes? :3
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