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> Vines ~ Chapter 1, {RFF Fanfic with a twist}
Black Iris
post Apr 13 2009, 02:18 AM
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Chapter 1 is done. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/darth-toot.gif)

~Chapter 1


"C'mon Mist! It will be really fun. You'll love it"

Fine. Just once.
Thanks. Your the best." He gave me a friendly hug and took off running into the dungeon as dirt went flying into my face.

I took a deep breath. I knew this was a bad idea, but I didn't know it would screw up my life that much. It was suppose to be a friendly little trip into a dungeon with Raguna. Everything before this was perfect. Well I guess sometimes perfection can be perfect heck.

I just slowly walked into the dungeon. They never interested me, so I was thinking to myself, just get it over with. Raguna took out a map of the dungeon we were in, I don't recall him ever telling me the name of it. Oh well. I suppose it doesn't matter.
"Ok, if we are here, and we want to go here..." Raguna pointed to places on the map and dragged his finger from one to another.

I wasn't even paying attention, I get like that when I'm in a place I have never been in before. I saw a small sparkle in a rock that led me to believe something was inside.
Hey, can I have your hammer, I think there is either silver or copper in this rock...
Are you even listening to me?

I walked up and looked around the moist and green dungeon. It looked like one of those really old mansions with moss all over. I didn't see him anywhere, or hear him.
R-r-r-aguna?
Is this a prank? Its not funny. Get out, now.

"H-help..."
I heard a high-pitched scream coming from a narrow hallway with vines lining the walls. I tried to find him as fast as I possibly could but I'm just not a fast runner and I probably never will be. I saw what was possibly the worst thing in my life.
He was laying there, lifeless, blood all over.

I grabbed some cheap, junky cloth off the ground that was about as thick as a paper towel. I wrapped it around his wounds hoping it would at least stop the bleeding. I struggled to pick him up but some how I managed to do it and carried him to the church as fast as I could, which isn't very fast.

Oh dear..." Lara took the body away and gently laid him on the bed.
Mist, lets leave Lara to her work. "
I turned around to look at Raguna.
Okay....

Stella tried to start a conversation to get my mind off it but I couldn't possibly talk about gardening when my best friend and love is over in the next room dying. I just laid down on the bench and close my eyes and tried to fall asleep, forgetting everything has happened. I would awake the next morning and Raguna would be back to perfect health. Perfect enough that we could look back at this incident and laugh at it like it was a silly little joke.. Just... fall.... asleep-----

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Raguna.....
She's awake. Thats good."

I cracked open my eyes to see Stella and Lara watching over me like angels, well maybe Lara wasn't an angel. She yells at me for getting paper cuts. I wish she would loosen up a bit.

Why am I here? Where's Raguna? He said we could go swimming at the beach today....

We tried are best to save him. His funeral is Spring 14. "

Its okay. I understand. I'll be leaving now.

When I heard what happened it felt like something died inside of me. I couldn't bring myself to cry. Its just not like me...

~TO BE CONTINUED~
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Be Happy!
post Apr 13 2009, 02:20 AM
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I r back from teh dead :3
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thats pretty good Iris. Just try to add more detail, { I had that problem to! }
Keep on working (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalasmile.gif)
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showchoirgirl
post Apr 13 2009, 02:25 AM
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It's very good. It's a mini-chapter (like you said), but it's good. Keep writing :).
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Lenyo
post Apr 13 2009, 02:45 AM
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I don't remember selling my soul to you.
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My Ragunas to ripped to get beaten up...
And good jorb.
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Black Iris
post Apr 13 2009, 03:17 AM
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The mini chapter is now a full chapter. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/emot-kraken.gif)
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Lenyo
post Apr 13 2009, 03:30 AM
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I don't remember selling my soul to you.
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................ /:

........ I didnt really like that at all to be honest..... D:
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Black Iris
post Apr 13 2009, 03:33 AM
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QUOTE (Lenyo @ Apr 12 2009, 11:30 PM) *
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........ I didnt really like that at all to be honest..... D:


Well it will get better I guess. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalasad.gif)
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Lenyo
post Apr 13 2009, 03:36 AM
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I don't remember selling my soul to you.
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I didnt like that you killed Raguna... Thats all...
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Black Iris
post Apr 13 2009, 03:42 AM
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Well he will make an appearance somewhere later in the story somehow
I wanted to try using it from a girl's perspective

Crap... how do you change the topic title?
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Horcrux
post Apr 27 2009, 11:35 PM
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whatever
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I like it,the twist is fine. Keep writing!!!

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