unknown identity, it about a half werewolf and half vampire Options

[slient vampire]

HEY! HEY! WHAT HAPPENING TO ME?!? MOM!! as I woke from sweat and blood I ran to my mother room to cry into her shoulder to tell her my dream but all she could say it just a phase sweetie. it will pass... it will pass...

chapter one~why

As I stare into the moon to change from vampire to werewolf I thought to myslef that night my parents told me that I was a vampire/werewolf I never belived them but now I reget that day because I get sick of that replaying in side my head....suddley I heard a branch crack I turn in defense. O it just you Scott... Hey! Quiency do u want to wait with me until we phase and start are rempage? whatever I dont care beside were going to fight each etheir like we do every night. that true... as we sat there and began with the pains of turning into a werewolf I suddly had this earge to kill someone but not anyone but my mother! I never had that feeling before?!? I tryed to get it out of me before it to late.But it was to late I began to run...

chapter two>unknown
As I running trying to stop myslef I thought to my self how come I want to kill her if she didnt do anything wrong to me... or did she as I was wondering this scott was chaseing afther me runing like a crazy man trying to kill me like always but never succeds in it right when he was about to attack me he jumped around andx stood there staring wardeing as soon as that happen I ran into my house head on tripping o n ewverything then I fianlly stop in front of my dead father and mother bodys just lifeles and cold.....

[Hasfusel]

chapter one~why

As I stare into the moon to change from vampire to werewolf I thought to myslef that night my parents told me that I was a vampire/werewolf I never belived them but now I reget that day because I get sick of that replaying in side my head....suddley I heard a branch crack I turn in defense. O it just you Scott... Hey! Quiency do u want to wait with me until we phase and start are rempage? whatever I dont care beside were going to fight each etheir like we do every night. that true... as we sat there and began with the pains of turning into a werewolf I suddly had this earge to kill someone but not anyone but my mother! I never had that feeling before?!? I tryed to get it out of me before it to late.But it was to late I began to run...

That was illegible, so I've gone to the trouble of preparing an English language version~

Chapter One~ Why

As I stared into the moon, about to change from vampire to werewolf, I thought back to myself about that night my parents told me that I was a werewolf vampire. Now I reget that day, and I get sick of it replaying inside my head over and over...
A branch cracked in the darkness. I crouched, ready to pounce, but then I saw who it was. "Oh, it's just you, Scott..." I said.
"Hey! Quincy! Do you want to wait with me until we phase and start another empage?" he shouted from the garden.
"Whatever," I said with a sigh, "I don't care. Besides we're going to end up fighting each other like we do every night."
"That's true..."
As we sat there and began with the pains of turning into a werewolf I began to feel the usual urge to kill someone... not just anyone this time however, but my mother! I never had experienced such a feeling of hate for an individual before. I tried to get the thought out of me before it was too late. But it was too late. Leaping down from my window, I began to run...

[slient vampire]

thank u I think that sounds better then the real one

[Hasfusel]

As I said, you need a basic grasp of grammar and spelling before you write or nobody will bother to read it. Go read a book or something. I'm not trying to be harsh, just helpful. Don't get me wrong.

[slient vampire]

As I said, you need a basic grasp of grammar and spelling before you write or nobody will bother to read it. Go read a book or something. I'm not trying to be harsh, just helpful. Don't get me wrong.

I been told that before and I do read books

[Twilight Wandere...]

Trust me, she reads books (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalaexdee.gif)
Hmm, this is pretty good, I like it, write more please (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalagrin.gif)

[Hasfusel]

Helpful tips~

- Full stop at the end of each sentance, and then a space. Like so.

- Capital letter at the beginning of a sentance, for names of people, countries, and the date. Nothing else.
Example: It is Tuesday today. It is the 24th of February. Hello, friends. My name is Hasfusel.

- Put speech marks in front of and behind speech, e.g. "Hello, my name is Dave," said Dave.

- Start a new paragraph when a different person is speaking, e.g. The woman looked around. "Who are you?" he asked.
"My name's Bond. James Bond." said James. "I'm here to take all your money."
"I won't let you." said the woman. "No."
"In that case, I'll kill you." said James.
"How?"
"With this handy knife."
"Oh. Take the money, then."

- Take the effort to spell right, and use commas when you need them. If you aren't sure on a spelling, check in a dictionary or something.

[Lindstrom]

I'm pretty sure the parents were killed by Belmonts. That first paragraph is bullcrap.

[Hasfusel]

To put it bluntly, yes. I'm sorry. Even graced with good grammar and spelling, it's enough to make Bram Stoker turn in his grave. You need practise.

[slient vampire]

OK IGET THE POINT WRITE FILPING BETTER JEZZ U DONT HAVE TO TELL ME SIX THOASNDS TIMES AND I DONT CARE I DINT THINK OF THE PARENTS MAN THATS ANNOYING

sorry I hate when pepole do that but yea sorry

[Hasfusel]

OK IGET THE POINT WRITE FILPING BETTER JEZZ U DONT HAVE TO TELL ME SIX THOASNDS TIMES AND I DONT CARE I DINT THINK OF THE PARENTS MAN THATS ANNOYING

sorry I hate when pepole do that but yea sorry

English language version:

Ok, I get the point. Write flipping better, jeez! You don't have to tell me six thousand times and I don't care that I didn't think of the parents! Man, that's annoying!

Sorry, I hate it when people do that. Sorry.

- Hasfusel, correcting killer grammar fails since 1993

[slient vampire]

English language version:

Ok, I get the point. Write flipping better, jeez! You don't have to tell me six thousand times and I don't care that I didn't think of the parents! Man, that's annoying!

Sorry, I hate it when people do that. Sorry.

- Hasfusel, correcting killer grammar fails since 1993

.................thanks?