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Yume
post Oct 3 2008, 08:19 PM
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Maximum Camwhore
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So, I like to write poems when I feel certain emotions some times, and I thought I could share with you guys. :]
Criticize if you want, but I did my best. :]

I wrote this when I was feeling a bit down and it put a small smile back on my face. :]

Once Upon A Time

Once upon a time
There was a magical place
With magical trees
And magical flowers

Once upon a time
There was a little girl
Who didn't want to be rude
but wouldn't obey her parents

Once upon a time
A little girl walked
Through the magical forest
Picking magical flowers

Once upon a time
There was a little girl
who's smile never faded
and who's heart kept on beating

Once Upon a time
A little girl
Smiled to herself

Because she knew
That the flowers would make her smile
and the rules would make her frown.
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Jitterbug
post Oct 3 2008, 08:25 PM
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Patience, my young grasshopper.
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OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOoooooooooooooookaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaayyyy........I didn't quite get that 1... :( But hey it sounds pretty good. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/lalasmile.gif)
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Yume
post Oct 3 2008, 08:28 PM
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Yeah, probably needs some tweaking, but it was a short poem I came up with in like, 10 minutes. :o
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Chicken
post Oct 3 2008, 10:10 PM
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Because I said so.
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"Once upon a time
There was a little girl
who's smile never faded
and who's heart kept on beating"

I especially like this line. It's cute. :]
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Hasfusel
post Oct 4 2008, 05:41 PM
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Goodnight
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Magical trees and magical flowers. Reminds me of that time I took those pil- *gets shot*
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Jitterbug
post Oct 4 2008, 09:00 PM
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Patience, my young grasshopper.
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Joined: 16-September 08
My fav. line is:

"Once Upon a time
A little girl
Smiled to herself

Because she knew
That the flowers would make her smile
and the rules would make her frown."
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