Yume Poems/Lyrics, Enojy my FAIL attempt at trying to be intellectual and artistic. :] Options

[Yume]

So, I like to write poems when I feel certain emotions some times, and I thought I could share with you guys. :]
Criticize if you want, but I did my best. :]

I wrote this when I was feeling a bit down and it put a small smile back on my face. :]

Once Upon A Time

Once upon a time
There was a magical place
With magical trees
And magical flowers

Once upon a time
There was a little girl
Who didn't want to be rude
but wouldn't obey her parents

Once upon a time
A little girl walked
Through the magical forest
Picking magical flowers

Once upon a time
There was a little girl
who's smile never faded
and who's heart kept on beating

Once Upon a time
A little girl
Smiled to herself

Because she knew
That the flowers would make her smile
and the rules would make her frown.