My Untitled Story, Who wants to help me! Options

[Charmy]

Well, who wants to help me make my story better or help me edit it. I know that sounds boring but it'll be funner than you think. Anyone can add in ideas but warning, I may not use 'em. So BEWARE!
Well, the story is like a show, it doesn't just doesn't focus on one person it focus on a couple, so don't get confused. I got my idea from Twilight's RPG (Thankyou!).
Now, it does get a bit creepy, before I add a creepy part to the story, like blood or dead bodies, try not to read if you don't wanna.
Now, this is also a place where you can just read my story and not help me (Dam you!) Anyway, here is the beginning part:



'Isn't it so beautiful...'
'Yeah.' Erin turns his head to his love. Capri is staring at the sky
clueless of it all. 'Capri...' Capri turns her head to Erin 'D-do you think...'
'Do I think what?'
'Do you think that... Anything co-could happen with...'
'With who?' Erin was slightly frustrated, and was finding it hard to speak. Capri was looking at him, wondering what he was going to say. Capri was halve-knee deep in the water while Erin was on the grass. He came forward to Capri. He looked at the sky when Capri was staring at him. 'Yes?'
Erin thinks about all the times when thet were little. They had been best friends from when they first met. He was hoping that he wouldn't destroy any of that.
'Do you think you could love me?' Capri looked out to the moon. Capri was silent, and Erin looked down into the water and watched her reflection. He had saw her walk over to him, he turned around to her. 'Do you?' Capri smiles and puts her hand on his cheek. She kissed him in the moonlight. They wrapped their arms around eachover and kissed. When their lips left eachover Capri said I do. Erin smiles, Capri smiles, they then walk off deeper in Kischt forest.



So, what do you think so far?

[Charmy]

Lol. I just realised I wrote "Stroy" instead of "Story". I deserve a slap on the head *Slap*! And I've edit my story a bit. I'll do more when I'm on the laptop instead of the wii. And I'll try to do stuff about backgrounds.

Okay, I am bored and can't think what to do next with my story so I am putting down whos what.
Erin: Vampire (Forgot to mention somewhere, sorry!)
Daze: Halve elf & turn stuff into dust (Disintegrate)
Paige & Paine: Elves, by the way these two are TWINS!
Anastacia: Human & Power (unkown so far)
Jesse: Ghost & turn invisible
Hannah & Juni: Humans & Can stop time
Kail: Human
Ko & Daze: Werewolfs, by the way, if you didn't guess Ko's a mute
Don't know if I missed any but oh well!

This post has been edited by Charmy: Aug 18 2008, 08:24 AM