My Untitled Story, Who wants to help me! Options

[Charmy]

Well, who wants to help me make my story better or help me edit it. I know that sounds boring but it'll be funner than you think. Anyone can add in ideas but warning, I may not use 'em. So BEWARE!
Well, the story is like a show, it doesn't just doesn't focus on one person it focus on a couple, so don't get confused. I got my idea from Twilight's RPG (Thankyou!).
Now, it does get a bit creepy, before I add a creepy part to the story, like blood or dead bodies, try not to read if you don't wanna.
Now, this is also a place where you can just read my story and not help me (Dam you!) Anyway, here is the beginning part:



'Isn't it so beautiful...'
'Yeah.' Erin turns his head to his love. Capri is staring at the sky
clueless of it all. 'Capri...' Capri turns her head to Erin 'D-do you think...'
'Do I think what?'
'Do you think that... Anything co-could happen with...'
'With who?' Erin was slightly frustrated, and was finding it hard to speak. Capri was looking at him, wondering what he was going to say. Capri was halve-knee deep in the water while Erin was on the grass. He came forward to Capri. He looked at the sky when Capri was staring at him. 'Yes?'
Erin thinks about all the times when thet were little. They had been best friends from when they first met. He was hoping that he wouldn't destroy any of that.
'Do you think you could love me?' Capri looked out to the moon. Capri was silent, and Erin looked down into the water and watched her reflection. He had saw her walk over to him, he turned around to her. 'Do you?' Capri smiles and puts her hand on his cheek. She kissed him in the moonlight. They wrapped their arms around eachover and kissed. When their lips left eachover Capri said I do. Erin smiles, Capri smiles, they then walk off deeper in Kischt forest.



So, what do you think so far?

[Twilight Wandere...]

*Claps hands IRL*
Amazing, just amazing!
I read the name Paine and was like 0_0
It threw me off guard...
My RPG was an inspiration?
I don't see how that happened.
I loved the part about the lake and the blood ^^
(But I am the person that watched a movie and liked the part where the dude got ripped in half and and his head eaten...)
And, yes, I read all of that...