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[hmbabe]

Tragedy hm tot lovestory by hmbabe

Felicia:"My name is Felicia"

Luke:"Hi im Luke"

Felicia:"Cool hair" I said to him blushing,

Luke:"oh thanks I guess see ya I have to go on a date with Kathy"

Why are men are just so subtle and I thought he likked me wow I felt dumb so we said our good byes and left, Kathy shes not to bright I thought well then again nither was luke I guess I should be happy for him besides if hes happy im happy oh what am I kidding im in love so I went home and changed into my maids gown that was totally hawt I was going to the bar not for the drinking but for the boys duh I couldnt wait maybe that was where luke was having the date sure enough luke was there but apparently kathy was mad at luke for playing the video games she was steaming red she was so mad she went up to owen and made out with him luke watched the whole thing he looked dizzy but when he saw me he fainted I ran over to him but this dancer girl ran up to him and gave him cpr before I could reach him I was so mad I stomped up to her and demanded an explanation instead she just woke up luke and tounged him

that was ch 1 hope u like post ur fanfics here too

I looked so hurt duke could tell and he cant notice anything so he came over and tried to set me up with toby ughhh then owen ughhh then calvin ughh then gill no way then julious yes finally duke has some taste julious looked at me with his cold eyes I looked away when I looked back he was gone wow that was fast so I went into the woods to look for him

Felicia:"julious where are you"

all of the sudden pack of wild dogs ran up to me snarling so I screamed naturally in a blink of an eye juli Thats my nickname I gave him was ther

Juli:"what are u doing here" he screamed into my ear

Felicia:"I I I uh was just llooking fofor yoou" I stammered barely getting it out , then again he gave me the cold stare that made me want to jump off a cliff one of the wilddogs lunged at me and everything went black the next morning I woke up I was in the hospital

Felicia:"whwhat happened" I felt really dizzy and there was something that stung on my head I looked into the mirror and saw stitches

Felicia:"great" I said sarcastically the in a split second I saw juli

Felicia:"how do u do that" I asked

Juli:"do what" he said confused

Felicia:"u know where your not in here but then when I blink my eyes your back"

Juli:"we will never speak of this again" he growled at me.

Felicia:"ookay" I said suspiciously.

Juli:"I brought you flowers" he choked out.

Felicia:"thanks" I said blushing.

Juli:"um bye"

Felicia:"do you have to go" of course he was already gone

that was ch 2 please comment or post ur fanfics here

Felicia: I sat in the hospital bed reading farming weekly "wow I didnt know you can grow turnips in ponds"

Juli:what was that

Felicia:how long have you been here

Juli:just two hours but ive only been in here two minutes

Felicia:what do u need

Juli:excuse me

Felicia:I mean what do u want from me

Juli: I cant just stop by to say hi

Felicia:really Juli

Juli:okay I wanted to apologize

Felicia:for what

Juli:fighting zombies what do u think

Felicia:really I dont know

Juli:so u were unconscious oh its nothing

Felicia:please tell me

Juli:fine I blah balh

Felicia:what

Juli:I dropped you on your head on the way over here

Felicia:you did so ur not strong

Juli:no I am I just did it purposely

Felicia:what am I going to do with you

Juli:throw me in a toxic waste dump

That was ch3 hoped you liked it

[showchoirgirl]

Nice. I'd like to see an addition, please Twilight Wanderer?:)
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hmbabe: The second was better than the first, but might I suggest using play formatting if you aren't going to start new paragraphs with dialogue? Please don't take this to heart, because I see so much potential:)! Try this:

Luke: Hi, I'm Luke.
Felicia: Cool Hair.

What I must say for you is that you have a great idea. I think the romance between Julius and Felicia makes for an interesting fanfic. Please write more, I want to see what happens! But please make it clearer with formatting :)?

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I need some feedback (thanks hmbabe!) from some people for my fanfic Dead Roses (it's in Any Colour You Like in its own thread) please read.
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Christmas Wish

Chapter One

The feeling of nostalgia and anxiousness clouded my mind as I walked through the inch-high snow with the masculine figure before me. My husband, Marlin. We were going to cut a Christmas tree for our home, just a week before Christmas. It would be our first Christmas tree together, if that makes sense. The way we were going out to the forest to cut down a tree almost made me wonder if my father and mother ever did that.

My name is Jill Tailor. To explain... Where to begin? The answers are endless. I could start with my birth and head forward or possibly even start at my adolescence. But to prevent digressing further, I believe I'll start with where I live at and why.

Well, I live in Forget-Me-Not Valley. It's a long name, right? But it's named that because of Tony Vallier, the man who founded the village, was amazed by the number of Forget-Me-Not flowers that grew. He thought the place had to be named for those flowers. So anyways, he and his family settled on a small hill. That hill is filled with beautiful flowers every spring, it's a wonderful sight that many people from other towns come to see.

I live, with Marlin, on a small farm in Forget-Me-Not Valley. It was given to me by my mother and father when they passed on. That was when I was only four. But my grandparents in Flowerbud took care of me, so I never really remembered my life in Forget-Me-Not Valley. When I turned eighteen, they told me about the farm. I decided to go. And so, I've been here the past year. In that year, I became Jill Tailor.

I must say, though, I do love my husband unconditionally, despite our seven year age difference. I know it's weird that I'm nineteen and he's twenty-six, but it's not like he's old enough to be my father or anything. Marlin was gruff, and fatherly like. I guess I just loved that about him.

Anyways, back to the story. We were walking along through the forest looking for the perfect tree through the drifts of snow. But I suddenly felt sick. My knees gave way and I knelt painfully in the snow. Marlin whisked around to see what was the matter, his stony blue eyes met my pain-endowed brown eyes.

"What's wrong, Honey?" he asked, leaning over grasping my arm gently.

"I-I... I don't know... I feel like I'm going to..." I managed before my breakfast regurgitated through my esophogus.

His caring face turned into a bit of a disgusted, but understanding one. He held my shoulders so I wouldn't fall into my half-way digested food. Thank goodness he did, because I would've fallen into it if he hadn't held me when he did.

I finished retching and he picked me up like I was a little girl. I thought he would be carrying me home, but he kept going straight when we crossed the entrance of our farm. By then, his destination was clear to me. He was going to Doctor Hardy. Great, an examination.

When he opened the door, Doctor Hardy was standing at the table, mixing medicines. Marlin spoke words I didn't bother to listen to and laid me on the hospital bed. I was almost mad at him for taking me here. Doctor Hardy edged closer and pulled the curtains together. He pulled out his stethoscope and put it on my left side. The procedure went as normal from there. He asked a few personal questions I didn't think necessary, but one. After my answer, he nodded and gave a contented sigh.

"Jill, will you step over here with me?" he motioned for me.

And yet another test was done. I didn't know what it was for, because I had never had it done before. But soon, he was done and I went back to sit on the cot for a moment while he decided on the results. I was a bit exhausted.

Ten minutes later, Dr. Hardy came to me with a smile on his face. He wouldn't tell me what I had or anything at all, but he simply pulled back the curtains. Marlin looked nervous and upset, staring at the floor while sitting in a folding chair. When he heard us, his face darted upward with the eternal question, "What's wrong with her, Doc?"

"Nothing at all!" he smiled, sneakily.

Marlin looked upset, "Then why the heck did she throw up this mornin'?"

"That's typical for a woman that's with child..." his smile grew bigger.

My eyes flew to the Doctor, then to Marlin. Marlin's blue eyes grew bright and jumped to my face. We both screamed and ran into each other's arms. A baby. Wow. The whole doctor's office ordeal was worth it all. I would soon be a mother. Wow.

"Jill!" Marlin yelled happily.

"Oh, Marlin! Our first child!" I squealed.

Dr. Hardy chuckled at our childish attitudes, but they were well-deserven. We were going to have a baby. The product of our undying love for each other.

"I love you!" he said, enthusiastically.

"And I love you!" I answered back.

A baby would complete our home. A little one that would wander around the farm soon enough and possibly learn about farming. The unadulterated, pure thought of our child was absolutely the best Christmas gift either of us could ask for.

Marlin and I farewelled the good doctor and we headed home, but Marlin wouldn't let me walk. He just had to carry me, which I thought was extra sweet. Only about a month pregnant and he was already so careful and thoughtful. He would definetely be a good father.

So that night, Marlin was extra helpful. He cleaned up the house for me, he cooked dinner, washed the dishes, and even made me hot chocolate and cookies. I had no doubts whatsoever of our love or our competency to raise a child. All that was left to do was to get a bed, toys, diapers, clothes, and everything else... And learn the basics of childcare from Marlin's mother... The more I thought about it, the more I contradicted my feeling of readiness to raise a child. It was just the mood swings... right?