My Untitled Story, Who wants to help me! Options

[Charmy]

Well, who wants to help me make my story better or help me edit it. I know that sounds boring but it'll be funner than you think. Anyone can add in ideas but warning, I may not use 'em. So BEWARE!
Well, the story is like a show, it doesn't just doesn't focus on one person it focus on a couple, so don't get confused. I got my idea from Twilight's RPG (Thankyou!).
Now, it does get a bit creepy, before I add a creepy part to the story, like blood or dead bodies, try not to read if you don't wanna.
Now, this is also a place where you can just read my story and not help me (Dam you!) Anyway, here is the beginning part:



'Isn't it so beautiful...'
'Yeah.' Erin turns his head to his love. Capri is staring at the sky
clueless of it all. 'Capri...' Capri turns her head to Erin 'D-do you think...'
'Do I think what?'
'Do you think that... Anything co-could happen with...'
'With who?' Erin was slightly frustrated, and was finding it hard to speak. Capri was looking at him, wondering what he was going to say. Capri was halve-knee deep in the water while Erin was on the grass. He came forward to Capri. He looked at the sky when Capri was staring at him. 'Yes?'
Erin thinks about all the times when thet were little. They had been best friends from when they first met. He was hoping that he wouldn't destroy any of that.
'Do you think you could love me?' Capri looked out to the moon. Capri was silent, and Erin looked down into the water and watched her reflection. He had saw her walk over to him, he turned around to her. 'Do you?' Capri smiles and puts her hand on his cheek. She kissed him in the moonlight. They wrapped their arms around eachover and kissed. When their lips left eachover Capri said I do. Erin smiles, Capri smiles, they then walk off deeper in Kischt forest.



So, what do you think so far?

[Charmy]

Yay! Thesaurus!
Alrighty. I will do this part of the story slowly, because idea's went away. So, IDEA'S!



'...Anastacia?' Anastacia mumbles slowly then jumps up from the bed noticing Capri standing in front of her. 'It's morning now.' Anastacia shook her head in fear.
'Anastacia?' Anastacia sighs and asks what to do now. Capri shrugs.
'We could go outside.' Anastacia looks out the window and see's people walking past. She goes and stares out the window and forgets about Capri. Capri walks downstairs and see's Hannah walkig around.
'Mmm... So hungry.'
'Should I make you breakfast?' Hannah turns around and see's Capri and nods. She walks over to the kitchen and starts making some wheat for Hannah to eat while she sat on a chair halve asleep.
Anastacia stops looking out the window and starts looking for Capri. As she goes downstairs she stares at Hannah.
'Hannah, get your head up. Here's you breakfast.' Capri places the food onto the table and brushes Hannah's hair. Anastacia puts her head down feeling empty inside. Capri looks at Anastacia and asks if she is hungry? She nods then slwoly walks over to the table. She sits on the chair and fiddles with her fingers. 'How are you feeling Anastacia?' She looks over at Capri.
'Umm...' She starts to mumble words until Capri gives her some food to eat. She eats it in a rush then places her hand over her stomach. It's aching and is hurting her. Capri looks over at her and ask how she is feeling, as she can see that something is wrong. 'M-My stomach hurts.'
'Why don't you lay down.' She helps Anastacia over to the couch and gets her some water to drink. As she receives the glass of water she slowly falls asleep.