My Untitled Story, Who wants to help me! Options

[Charmy]

Well, who wants to help me make my story better or help me edit it. I know that sounds boring but it'll be funner than you think. Anyone can add in ideas but warning, I may not use 'em. So BEWARE!
Well, the story is like a show, it doesn't just doesn't focus on one person it focus on a couple, so don't get confused. I got my idea from Twilight's RPG (Thankyou!).
Now, it does get a bit creepy, before I add a creepy part to the story, like blood or dead bodies, try not to read if you don't wanna.
Now, this is also a place where you can just read my story and not help me (Dam you!) Anyway, here is the beginning part:



'Isn't it so beautiful...'
'Yeah.' Erin turns his head to his love. Capri is staring at the sky
clueless of it all. 'Capri...' Capri turns her head to Erin 'D-do you think...'
'Do I think what?'
'Do you think that... Anything co-could happen with...'
'With who?' Erin was slightly frustrated, and was finding it hard to speak. Capri was looking at him, wondering what he was going to say. Capri was halve-knee deep in the water while Erin was on the grass. He came forward to Capri. He looked at the sky when Capri was staring at him. 'Yes?'
Erin thinks about all the times when thet were little. They had been best friends from when they first met. He was hoping that he wouldn't destroy any of that.
'Do you think you could love me?' Capri looked out to the moon. Capri was silent, and Erin looked down into the water and watched her reflection. He had saw her walk over to him, he turned around to her. 'Do you?' Capri smiles and puts her hand on his cheek. She kissed him in the moonlight. They wrapped their arms around eachover and kissed. When their lips left eachover Capri said I do. Erin smiles, Capri smiles, they then walk off deeper in Kischt forest.



So, what do you think so far?

[Charmy]

Thanks Hasfusal...
I don't always explain everything at first, it may actually only be explained right at the end if I feel like it! Anyway, I will try. It is just harder when I am using the wii because of the scrolling. When you go to edit something it starts all the way at the bottom, and it only has this screen for two sentances. And so I have to press the up button thousands of times to get to the top then go down. And I can't start from down to up because that'll confuse my head. And my brother always gets the laptop because he can't play wesnof or something on the wii.
Though, I am lucky that I have a keyboard for it (now), but it still only has that two sentance screen and it takes for ever for me to go through everything I wrote. So when I get time or figure something else I will do all that stuff.

And thanks for your thoughts everyone!